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I'm currently doing this thing where I re-read my old yaois i've read or read new ones and make sure to review all of them.

This is my rant for down and dirty:

4/10

Notes whilst reading-
Major second hand embarrassment.
Artstyle isn’t that good, can be quite cool and different at times but mostly it’s so bad.
Plot is boring and cliche.
Too fast paced
He said top had feelings for him turns out he had feelings for the top all along but top just wanted him to become a male prostitute.
I don’t really enjoy stories like this.
I keep feeling anger throughout reading it like hwy does he keep going back to him IT SO ANNOYING
What the fuck is even happening after the top supposedly died
Too fast paced
Plot is kinda messy
WHAT THE FUCK DOES THE TOP MEAN BY “its a good thing you love me so I can fuk you legally” EW WHAT
EWWWW THEY LIKE MADE THE MC SOOOOO BAD AND LIKE TIWNKIFIED HIMTO THE MAX
Also what happened to the punk dude
EW EW EW TJE LAST CHAPTER GAVE ME SECOND HAND EMBARRASSMENT, NEVER AGAIN

Overall review:
The story at the start was extremely confusing, I didn’t know what was happening and I assumed the Seme had a crush on the Uke and Uke hated the Same. I was wrong. The Uke had a crush on the Seme the whole entire time and it was revealed in the dumbest way possible. He just woke up one day and decided “hey I actually like this dude so let me sleep with him.” It was written so poorly at the start, like it just felt so messy. I didn’t enjoy the concept or how they randomly threw in characters. Like the punk dude that was there fucking dissapeared after and we don’t know what happened to him it’s clear the author didn’t think about the story properly and probably was just planning the whole thing as they were going. Sure it was interesting at times and I did wonder what was going to happen but to be completely honest it was super cliche and boring. Like when I finally thought something big and new was going to take place the author just adds some overused plot instead.
I hate how the Uke keeps running back to the Seme when the seme so obviously was only interested in the Ukes body. I understand the seme begins developing feelings for the Uke later on but like come on Uke bro like know your worth, why are you running back to that man. sure I understand your ere broke and shit but like are you going to forget how he made you bleed out your ass and lit fucke you in an alley. Like it’s just not it.
Also so much character back stories are forgotten in this. I wan to know more about Charlie, more about the Seme and how he deiced to own a brothel and also mroe about the Uke and how his life was before he gained massive debt. I also want to know how the debt occurred and how he lived his first years of debt as. I have so much questions but like zero answers.
The art style is also shit, like sure at first I thought it was cool and different but the more I read the more I realised what it’s just flat out unappealing. Like why do they randomly gain lips and then randomly have great proportions.
I could rant about how shitty, fast paced, messy this story is forever. But overall it wasn’t that bad. It was defeintly more towards the shit side than the good but it defiently could have been way worse. The ending slightly saved it but honestly I was so close to not continuing it.
its a good thing you love me so I can fuk you legally - this line was the worst thing I have ever read though and probably why I will forever hate the Seme
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Omg it's like my second time taking the driving theory test AND I GEN DK HOW IM GONNA PASS. I'm gen soooo fucking stupid it's not even funny. Like how do I keep getting so much wrong on a fucking multiple choice test ITS SO WERID.
Worst of all you need to pay like £27 LIKE WHAT and my dad also said he will take some money from me if I have to retake it again IM SO FUCKING SCARED HE'S ACTUALLY GOING TO KILL ME
I'm so failing tmr and it's stressing me out I NEED TO PASS IT OTHERWISE IM DONE FOR.
Like all the questions are so fucking weird and I'm super slow so idk wtf is going on LIKE WHAT.

atleast I get to skip my bio test tmr BUT STILL I DONT WANNA STUDY FOR THE THEORY ITS SOOOO BORING but i need it if I want my license...

I'm so scared because if i don't pass the next mock it might cut into my yaoi night gooning sesh and like I DONT WANT THAT TO HAPPEN.
I WANT TO CONTINUE WRITING MY PHAIDEI FANFIC LIKE I HAVENT UPDATED IT FOR TWO MONTHS AND I HAVE COMMENTS OF PEOPLE ASKING ME TO UPDATE.

I'm almost done with the second chapter, but still so much of it left like they still dont have feelings for eachother and still are getting to know one another. I JUST WANT TO WRITE THEM MAKING OUT AND FALLING IN LOVE AND THEN POSSIBLE SMUT.

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